My favourite sport

    As we know, sport is an important part of our life.I am interested in sport and I do sports every day.
   My favourite sport is swimming. It is a healthy and popular sport and I learned to swim when I was only 5 years old. Although I am a little nervous in the water at first, with the help of my parents and coach, I could swim well after several weeks. Now, I am very good at swim and I go swimming over three times a week. As far as I am concemed ,swimming in the water is cool and exciting. During the summer holidays,I usually go swimming in the sea with my family and we always have a wonderful time.
    Swimming makes me healthy and brings me plenty of enjoyment.

批改：
1. It is a healthy and popular sport and I learned to swim when I was only 5 years old. 这两句简单句应该拆分,独立成句更好。去掉and ,换成句点。
2. Although I am a little nervous in the water at first, with the help of my parents and coach, I could swim well after several weeks. 说当年学游泳的事，应该用一般过去时。I am 改成I was .
3. Now, I am very good at swim and I go swimming over three times a week. 句型错误，be good at (doing )sth.此处swim 应该为swimming 。
4. As far as I am concemed 单词拼写错误 应该改为concerned.

参考例句:
(文)善长做某事  be good at (doing )sth

He is good at cooking

作文-地带点评:
作为初三学生的习作，作者有着比较好的语言组织能力，语言简洁，选词精准，句子表达也相对较标准，内容连贯，条理清晰，能熟练使用连接词，使文章更有整体性，连贯性，这点值得肯定.但有个别句子有语法、词法错误，但只要细心加勤动笔，相信今后的文章会更长更漂亮！

给 分 理 由:

整体结构完整，句子表达也相对较标准，内容连贯，条理清晰，能熟练使用连接词，如As we know，Although，As far as I am concerned使文章更有整体性，连贯性，这是大多数学生还做不到的。但是，两个句子有语法错误，扣分-4；单词拼写-1，共扣除5分。