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     I’m a girl of fifteen years old. I like outdoor activities. I want to go to the mountains and enjoy the life there. The city is full of noises. Cars make noise, factories make noise, amusement makes noise. But rural areas are different. Everywhere is quiet. Everything is natural. Only birds sing and rivers run. I would like to enjoy the space there forever. www.liuxuepaper.com
And I like a beautiful island. The sky is blue. The sun is shining. The birds are singing. I can see some cloud, a ship, a swan and some fish. I can see a rainbow when the sun shines through raindrops. The colors are always in the same order: red, orange, yellow, green, indigo, blue and violet. There is a jar of honey, a bag of candy, a jar of sugar, a bag of popcorn and a bar of chocolate. I like these very much.
      I want to go hunting in the cave. I want to go fishing on the mountain. I want to go swimming in the air. I want to go camping on any other planet. I want to go shopping in the sea and I want a visit to a Pirate Town.
    该学生语言流畅，美丽。清晰表达自己的愿望。内容新颖，健康。表现了她喜欢大自然的心情，暗含人们对环境污染严重。该文英语作文网www.liuxuepaper.com可以给打99分。

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批改：
1.The city is full of noises.句子中noise不可数名词，应该为noise.

2.I would like to enjoy the space there forever.该句子中的space指空间或者太空等意思，我觉得换成atmosphere或者surrounding.

总评：
这篇作文结构紧凑，语言通顺流畅，中心明确，把小作者的愿望展现的淋漓尽致！尽管有些特殊词的用法等仍有待提高，但是本篇作文仍不失为一篇佳作！
初中生写出来的作文，不容易！值得表扬，呵呵。