SAT考试写作满分范文鉴赏(5)(2)

　　Score Explanation SAT写作6分范文点评

　　This outstanding essay effectively and insightfully develops the point of view that “In at least some respects, we need other people in order to understand ourselves.” The writer demonstrates outstanding critical thinking by focusing on the differing examples of J. Alfred Prufrock and a peer from the writer’s own class to support this position. The essay first describes how, by not allowing himself to interact with women, Prufrock denies himself the approval necessary to “reveal Prufrock’s talents to him.” Next, the writer contrasts this with the shock a classmate feels after reading how his classmates describe him. Both of these clearly appropriate examples reinforce the writer’s position. This essay is well organized, focusing first on the character from Eliot’s poem and then smoothly shifting focus to the personal example of the writer’s peer. The strength of organization and focus allow this essay to demonstrate a depth of development, clear coherence, and smooth pro美国GREssion of ideas. The essay exhibits skillful use of language and demonstrates meaningful variety in sentence structure (“An excellent example of a literary character who could have psychologically benefitted from social interaction is J. Alfred Prufrock from T.S. Eliot’s poem ‘The Love Song of J. Alfred Prufrock.’ In the poem, Prufrock desires a relationship with a woman very much, but he refrains from initiating conversation because he fears that he could not hold the interest of a sophisticated lady”). Demonstrating clear and consistent mastery, this essay receives the highest score of 6.

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