美国GRE写作argument全部官方范文分析(6)(3)

　　COMMENTARY

　　This outstanding essay begins by noting that the argument "seems logical."

　　It then proceeds to discuss possible alternative explanations for the increase in car accidents and provides an impressively full analysis.

　　Alternatives mentioned are that

　　-- the two regions might have drivers of different ages and experience;

　　-- Forestville's topography, geography, cars, and/or roads might contribute to accidents;

　　-- six months might be an insufficient amount of time for determining that the speed limit is linked to the accident rate;

　　-- demographics might play a role in auto accidents;

　　-- population and auto density should be considered; and

　　-- the times of day when drivers in the two regions travel might be relevant.

　　The points are cogently developed and are linked in such a way as to create a logically organized essay.

　　Transitions together with interior connections create a smoothly integrated presentation.

　　For the most part, the writer uses language correctly and well and provides excellent variety in syntax.

　　The minor flaws (e.g., using "less" instead of "fewer") do not detract from the overall high quality of the critique.

　　This is an impressive 6 paper.

（责任编辑 陈奕璇）