2003年6月考试四级作文题：An Eye-Witness Account of a Traffic Accident
假设你在某日某时某地目击一起车祸，就此写一份见证书。
见证书须包括以下几点：
1、车祸发生的时间及地点；
2、你所见到的车祸情况；
3、你对车祸原因的分析。
例1． （2分段）

At 9:00, Jan. 20, 2003, I eye-witness a traffic accident in Dongfang Street.
I see that a（an） old people is hitted (hit)by a car.
In my opinion, the rapid driver is the main reason, but the old people also has his error.
东方教育点评：（1）字数明显不够，尽管都点题了，但只有三句话。
（2）有语法错误。
例2．（5分段）

In my opinion, the driver of Benz auto should be blamed on(for) the traffic accident. It was his drunk driving that resulted in this accident.

It is not(no) doubt that the traffic accident is a high(hot) topic in the modern(modern) society, different people have different attitude (attitudes) to this.

When it come(comes) to the accident, people think it responsible for the driver. But last Sunday I see(saw) a(an) accident. A woman crossed a street when a car turn(turned at) the crossing .it is too late to stop the car ,The women was bad(badly) hurt. The people who was walking along the street took the woman to hospital, (and) the driver came with them.

As far as （I am） concerned, the both sides have responsibility for this, begin（at the beginning）, the woman shouldnot cross the street. Forthemore, the driver should pay more attention. Last. we should take proper measure .Only (when) we take the measure and we （become） more careful can we have a colorful （life） tomorrow.
东方教育点评：(1)本文基本切题。
（2）但有的地方表达思想不清楚，层次不够清楚。如第二段把描述车祸情况和发生原因混为一谈，而最后一段的总结又很牵强。
来源：作文地带整理。

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