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英语作文点评 The man I admire

时间:2010-08-20来源:作文点评栏目:网友投稿英语作文作者:作文点评 英语作文收藏:收藏本文
Who do you most admire?I think it's easy to answer .And different people have different answers.So,let me tell you the man I admire. There are many emperores in ancient China,but kangxi is the greatest emperor in Chinese history.He was born in 1654 in the

    Who do you most admire?I think it's easy to answer .And different people have different answers.So,let me tell you the man I admire.

    There are many emperores in ancient China,but kangxi is the greatest emperor in Chinese history.He was born in 1654 in the Forbidden city and he came to the throne at the age of eight in1661.

    When he had sovereigh ,he arrested the powerful minister AoBai ang put down three prince'srebellions.He sent an army to drive away Russia's aggression and sighed a tieaty to stop them from invading China when he was on the throne twenty four years. He not only governed the Yellow River,but also cared about agriculture.He also issued Chinese dictionary during the resign of him.

    He was a great emperor through the ages.He will go down in the history forever .And he will be greatly missed.

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批 改1.Who do you most admire?改为Who do you admire most?

 

2..And different people have different answers.把and去掉。

3.sighed a tieaty 改为signed a treaty (签订条约)

这是一篇好文章,小作者初三就能以顺畅的笔调介绍一个伟大历史人物,实属难能可贵。希望继续努力。
参考例句(文)1.1.签(名);写下
He signed his name on the cheque.
他在支票上签了名

4.做手势(或其他动作)通知
She signed the child to be quiet.
她示意孩子安静下来。
点 评 小作者介绍了伟大的历史人物康熙,能用顺畅的笔调介绍康熙的历史功绩,可见小作者的英语功底和历史知识。
给 分 理 由 这是一篇好文章,小作者初三就能以顺畅的笔调介绍一个伟大历史人物,实属难能可贵。希望继续努力。
写得不错,希望继续努力。

建议小作者读一些用英语写的人物传记,进一步提高自己的阅读能力和写作能力。

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