Today is Wednesday. It is my fourteenth birthday. I got up very early in the morning and put on my new shoes happily.  My parents bought me the new shoes as my birthday presents. I went to school earlier than before.  I invited many of my classmates to come to my birthday party in the evening. They bought me lot of beautiful presents and say “Happy birthday to you!” to me . We sang birthday songs and ate a big birthday cake.  I am very happy today .

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They bought me lot of beautiful presents and say “Happy birthday to you!” to me . 改为：They bought me lots of beautiful presents and said “Happy birthday to you!” to me .许多用“a lot of”或“lots of”；前面谓语动词是bought，前后时态要保持一致，因此后面要用say的过去式said。叙述流畅清晰，简洁明了，文笔不错，继续努力。