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ETS官方Issue主题范文(二)的英语作文(2)

时间:2010-08-18来源:英语故事栏目:网友投稿英语作文作者:作文地带 英语作文收藏:收藏本文
As a result, America relinquished the Jim Crow laws and saw many other groups press for their individual rights as well. Television cameras rolled as Cesar Chavez organized the migrant workers in Cal

As a result, America relinquished the Jim Crow laws and saw many other groups press for their individual rights as well.
Television cameras rolled as Cesar Chavez organized the migrant workers in California and as Bella Abzug and Gloria Steinham linked arms to protest the lack of women's rights.


While the media helped to shape some attitudes about racism and gender it also helped to uncover the truth behind government lies.
During the Nixon


评价

This is an outstanding response, even though it is not quite finished.
The writer's views on the issue are so cogent, well articulated, and well developed that the writer was not penalized for failing to provide a conclusion.
What matters is the quality of thinking and writing displayed, not whether an essay is totally finished or has a certain number of words.


The writer's skill is apparent in the opening lines.
The first words, "For our grandparents it occurred," immediately spark the reader's interest.
The quick repetition of sentence structure and, once again, the intentionally vague use of "it" ("For the baby boomers it was") effectively draw the reader in.
By the third sentence, we know that this essay will address the complexity of the issue ("not simply being representative??? but creating them as well") and that the writer is fully in command of this discussion.


The rest of the essay addresses the influence of historical events and media on the values of modern society, from the "roaring twenties" to the "sixties and seventies."
Insightful analysis accompanies the historical references.
For example, the writer persuasively argues that prominent figures (King, but also Chavez, Abzug, and Steinham) advanced their social agendas by capitalizing on the power of the media to change public opinion.


Throughout the essay, the writer uses language and syntax effectively.
Word choice is precise ("cosmetics to accentuate their new bobbed haircuts"), sentences are structured to communicate ideas clearly ("There had to be another cause, and there was, the media"), and transitional phrases help move the argument forward ("Unlike the twenties, the sixties????" and "By doing so, King successfully began to change the traditional view of race.")


 

Occasional errors do appear (e.g., note the lack of logical comparison in "women??? wore their hemlines??? shorter than the decade before them"), but they are not intrusive.


Other 6 essays might be more fully developed; indeed, this essay would be stronger if the writer had gone on to discuss the media's role in Nixon's Watergate scandal and to bring the argument to its conclusion.liuxuepaper.com

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