我帮爸爸戒烟（作文地带提示：本文仅限参考，文章内有不少错误语法，我们只是觉得小作者写的不错，转载而已.）
大家都听说过球迷、歌迷吧？你猜我爸爸是什么迷？猜不出来吧，告诉你吧，我的爸爸是地地道道的是烟迷。每天放学回到家，我最常见的就是爸爸坐在沙发上“吞云吐雾”了，整个房间搞得乌烟瘴气。自从爸爸加入了烟民队伍以后，身体就不象以前了，脸色蜡黄，牙齿黑黄，连那夹烟的两根手指也黄了，我真为爸爸的身体担忧。于是，我下定决心要帮爸爸戒烟。
Everyone heard fans, the fans? You guess my dad? What is fan Can not guess right, to tell you the truth, my father is out-and-out is smoke fan. School every day at home, I most common: father sat on the sofa "content", whole room is badly messed up. Dad ever since joined the smokers team, the body is not after as before, sallow complexion, teeth black and yellow, even that clip of smoke two fingers and huang, I really worry for father's body. Hence, I determined to help father to give up smoking.
为了戒掉爸爸的烟，我绞尽脑汁，共想出了三条妙计。哼！就不怕他戒不掉。我先使出了第一招：藏烟。一天，我起了个大早，趁爸爸在睡觉，我想：烟一定在衣袋里，我伸手过去摸，哈！烟盒，我小心翼翼地掏出烟盒。爸爸动弹了一下，还好，只是翻个身。我忙把烟藏在我抽屉里，“啪”地一下上了锁。我自以为出师得力呢！可没想到爸爸第二天又吸起烟来。原来，爸爸早猜透了我的心思，自己私藏了一盒。咳！真拿他没办法。
In order to quit dad's smoke, racking my brains, total came up with three his sleeve. Hum! Is afraid that he not quit. First I used a recruit: hidden smoke. One day, I got up early, while dad in bed, I think: smoke must in his pocket, I hand past touch, ha! Cigerrat case, I gingerly took iv. Dad move once, fine, just side body. I'm busy putting cigarettes hidden in my drawer, "splat" once locked. I think I failed in the right-hand! However, dad again the next day smoking cigarettes. Originally, dad early psych out my mind, oneself conceals a box. Cough! True take he couldn't.
看来，不给他点厉害瞧瞧是不行了。于是，我使用了第二招：藏打火机。一天，爸爸顺手把打火机放在桌子上，就开始打电脑。我到桌子上拿书，顺手牵羊，一下子拿起打火机，转身就向楼下跑去。我一扔，就把打火机送进了垃圾箱。我自以为这一下可以奏效，没想到爸爸在做饭时来了“灵感”，把烟塞到煤气灶上点着了，又抽了起来。唉！可真让我苦笑不得。
Opinion, don't give him a severe look is washed-up. Then, I use the second recruit: hidden lighter. One day, my conveniently the lighter on the table and began to play computer. I take a book on the table, ShunShouQianYang, suddenly picked up the lighter, and turned to run downstairs. I throw, the lighter sent into the dustbin. I think this can work in cooking, but my father arrived inspiration, putting cigarettes to jam the gas stove lighted, and drew up. Alas! It really let me wry smile not.
看来，爸爸不好对付，我只好使出我的“杀手锏”——第三招：签合同啦！我在纸上写到：老爸，为了您和家人的健康，请戒烟吧！我还提出来以下要求：一.想吸烟时就含糖快。二.把烟全部上缴，如果违反规定，全部家务由爸爸承包。爸爸看了看，百般无奈之下签了字。并对我说：“好小子，用家务活来对付我，服了你了，”我和爸爸不约而同地笑了。嗬！别说，这一妙招果然奏效。从此，爸爸和他的“老朋友”——烟拜拜了！我家的“环保问题”也彻底得到了解决。
Opinion, dad difficult, I have to use my "killer" -- three recruit: sign a contract! I on paper wrote: dad, to you and your family's health, please stop smoking! I also brought out the following requirements: 1. Want to smoke when sugary fast. Two. The smoke all over, if, in violation of the regulations, all the housework by dad contracting. Dad took a look, truly the helpless under signed. And say to me: "good boy, with housework against me, admire you," my father and I happen to coincide the ground smiled. Ho! Don't say, a coup indeed as expected work. From then on, the father and his "old" - smoke bye-bye! Our "environmental protection question" is completely solved.
嘿嘿！爸爸戒掉了烟，我功不可没吧！
Hey hey! Dad, I quit smoking spun-he!
（指导教师李本华）
(teacher LiBenHua)
吉林省农安县红旗小学六年级：陈亮
Jilin NongAnXian red flag sixth graders: ChenLiang
点评：文章通过帮助爸爸戒烟，在与爸爸斗智斗勇过程中最终战胜了爸爸。整篇文章都是围绕着为爸爸戒烟这件事来写，突出了文章的中心，也侧面的表达了你对爸爸的关心。
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文章的语文很具有生活化，同时也通过生活中很普通的一件小事来折射出父子之间的理解与关爱，升华了文章的主题。
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文章在表达上也很具有趣味儿性，从与父亲的斗智过程中，每一种招式的运用都能看得出小作者做了精心的准备。文章读起来故事性很强，能够吸引读者的注意。可以算上一篇优秀的叙事佳作。希望陈亮同学在以后的生活中多去观察，多去品味，相信你会有更好的文章出现。
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