Soon graduated, in junior high school life, I met a lot of people a lot of things, when I entered high school campus after I still think of!
Feng teacher in my junior high school learning career you let me remember, I always don't learn your English well, but you never give up me, do you often encourage me to let me find the fun of learning, the surface looks very fierce you actually very gentle. I don't want to leave you, but high school is the way I had to choose, I will miss you, when you ask we think of the teacher after graduation, I very want to loudly say to you, but I can't I can only write it in the composition, I will always remember I have a teacher she name is feng.
小编点评： 这是赤裸裸的中国式英语啊~Chinglish 啊！
该篇作文的词汇量是有的，里面用了很多比较的好的单词和词组，例如：compus(校园)、encourage（鼓励）give up (放弃) think of (想起)等这些词汇和短语都比较好，甚至该篇作文的同学想要更加高级的词汇surface、fierce等，即使可能用法不正确，但也是值得鼓励的。这些词汇点都是该篇文章的亮点。
但该篇文章最大的硬伤是语法。考生在文章里面应用了时间状语从句，分词作状语等，这些都不错，可是文章仔细看的话，其内部的语法是完全错误的。
所以在此小编建议考生，增加词汇量很重要，可是词汇这些珍珠只有穿在语法这条链子上词汇真正的发光。否则，其价值可能只是类似一块石子。
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