金钱不仅能给我们带来幸福，而且也能给我们带来不幸。如果金钱给人们带来的不是真正的幸福，金钱就失去了自身的价值。我们必须清楚地认识到，金钱并不意味着一切。
　　
　　名师点评
　　
　　本文思路清晰，客观、公正地评价了钱的作用。层次分明，语言规范，简洁有力，使人们认识到金钱不是万能的。
　　文章恰到好处地引用了“Money makes the mare go”——社会上流传的一些人的金钱观，并进行了驳斥。一方面作者承认了金钱的重要，如没钱办不成事是有的，没钱甚至生活不下去也是有的，然而作者又以充分的论据论说了金钱并非万能，它买不来知识、买不到时间等。很有说服力。
　　文章中使用最佳的词语和句型有：a good house to live in，become true， bring sb.sth，a lot of，of course，and so on，not all...等。此外，文章中还恰当地使用了宾语从句、状语从句以及动词get。这都值得初学写作者学习。
　　
　　例文二
　　
　　 Please Protect the Nature
　　One afternoon in the summer vacation, Lin Ping, a friend of mine, and I went fish- ing. That was a beautiful day. We talked and laughed as we walked to the river near my home. The river wasn't very wide, and the water didn't run quickly. So we used to get lots of fish there.

After we got there, we first found a good place, then baited our hooks and threw them into the water. We waited and waited. One hour passed, we got nothing! I became impatient. ① Just before I decided to go, Lin Ping lifted a little fish. It cheered us though it was a little one. We fished on.
　　After a while, I lifted something heavy out of water, too. But there was nothing but some rubbish! How disappointed I was! We got only two little fish that whole after- noon.
　　"Why are there so few fish now?" I ②thought to myself on my way home but I couldn't understand. I thought and thought. ③Now I find the answer. The factories along the river often pour rubbish and waste water into the river, so the river is polluted. That kills a lot of the fish which used to be in the river.
　　I can't imagine what the world would be like if the water all over the world is pol- luted,no fish or bird,no beasts or other living things. We'll be punished(惩罚) by the nature. I want to say to the managers of the factories, "Please keep the water clean and the air fresh. Please protect the nature!"
　　
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　　请保护大自然
　　暑假的一天下午，我的一个朋友林平和我一起去钓鱼。那是美丽的一天，我们边说边笑来到我家附近的小河旁。小河不太宽，河水流得不太快，过去我们经常在那里钓到许多鱼。
　　到达那里后，我俩先找个好地方，接着准备好饵钩扔向水里。我们等呀等，一个小时过去了，没有任何动静!没法忍耐了，我正决定离去时，林平钓了一条小鱼。虽然鱼不大，却给我们带来了希望。我们接着钓。
　　过了一会儿，我的鱼钩漂动了，拉出来一看，是一些脏东西。我失望极了!整个下午我们只钓了两条小鱼。
　　“现在河里的鱼为什么这么少呢?”在回家的路上我想，但我不明白。我想了又想，终于找到了答案。原来沿河的工厂经常往河里倾倒垃圾、排放污水，河水被污染了，很多往日在这河里生存的鱼儿，渐渐地死掉了。
　　如果世界上的水像这样污染下去，不难想象我们的地球将来会是什么样子，没有鱼、鸟，没有野兽或者别的生物。我们将受到大自然的惩罚，我要对工厂经理们说：“请保护环境，请保护大自然。” liuxuepaper.com