Now I am in Junior Three. The pencil-box is still with me. The picture of cats and mice can't be seen any more, but it doesn't matter. It is even much nicer. It has given me a lot of help in my study
Now I am in Junior Three. The pencil-box is still with me. The picture of cats and mice can't be seen any more, but it doesn't matter. It is even much nicer. It has given me a lot of help in my study. Though there are more things in it than before, it didn't make any word of complaint (怨言). Oh, what a good and honest, quiet friend! I can get on very well with it for ever.
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我的文具盒
我有一个美丽的文具盒,我非常喜欢它。
六年前的一天,我上小学时,妈妈带我到商店买了这个文具盒。我还记得那时我首先看见一个又大又漂亮的文具盒,但它不够结实,我根本不喜欢。接着,我们继续寻找别的文具盒。突然,我看见了一个很小而制作精细的文具盒,它比其他的结实。所以,我很高兴地买下了,只花了五元钱。
我仔细看了看文具盒,上面有两只猫和几只小老鼠。画面上的那些猫并没有吃老鼠,它们好像非常友好,甚至很高兴地在一起戏耍。多么有趣啊!
自从我有了这个文具盒,我把学习用品都放在里面。如橡皮、圆珠笔、小刀和尺子。我在做功课或家庭作业时,能够自由地使用,从那时起,我再也不怕丢失文具了。这个文具盒成了我的好朋友,多么漂亮又是多么的方便啊!
现在我上初三了。这个文具盒仍然伴随着我。猫和老鼠的画面已经模糊不清了,这没有什么关系,它甚至更漂亮了。在学习上它给我提供了很多帮助,虽然文具盒里的东西比以前更多了,但它毫无怨言。噢,它是多么漂亮、多么诚实而又默默无闻的朋友啊!它将和我永远相伴。
佳作点评
每个同学都有自己的文具盒,它是学习中必不可少的物品。
作者能用已学的语言材料,写出对文具盒的特殊感情,值得称道。文章写得生动有趣,语句较通顺,层次分明,写出了对文具盒的喜爱。文章中运用极好的词语和句型有:take sb.to do sth. not strong enoughnot ...at all, look for, more than...,since then,spend...on,look at,there be, such as, not...any longer, not...any more, it doesn't matter, a lot of等。此外,还恰当地使用了时间状语从句、并列句、since引导的从句,这些均值得读者学习。
现在对标数码的几个句子谈点意见:
①"to buy it"应改为"to have it"。按照习惯用法,如果在商店里购买商品时,可以说::I want to buy sth.”而拿定主意,准备付钱买下此物时,一般不用buy而要说“I will have it”或“I will take it.”注意:have作“买”讲时,是持续动词,可以与一段时间状语连用。如:He has had the wathch for a year. 但but没有此种用法,因为它是暂短动词。②文章题目是"My Pencil—box",因此,主语we应改为I才符合英语惯例。另外,根据only习惯用法,在这里应置于 spent之后才正确。③“…was doing...”应改成“…did…”才符合英语句法原则。
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