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2004-2009高考英语满分作文及名师评析(5)

时间:2010-08-27来源:作文地带整理栏目:高考英语作文作者:作文地带 英语作文收藏:收藏本文
要点:1. 问题:手机不响铃,不能发短信;该产品已售完,无法更换;型号新,无配件,无法维修。 2. 要求:公司应尽快予以更换。 注意:1. 词数为100左右; 2. 参考词汇:配件:: spare part; 3. 电子邮件的开头和结尾已

  要点:1. 问题:手机不响铃,不能发短信;该产品已售完,无法更换;型号新,无配件,无法维修。 2. 要求:公司应尽快予以更换。

  注意:1. 词数为100左右;

  2. 参考词汇:配件:: spare part;

  3. 电子邮件的开头和结尾已为你写好(不计入你所写词数);

  4.已给出的电子邮件的开头和结尾不得抄入答题卡。

  Dear Sir,

  I am writing to you for the mobile phone of Dephone-S250 I bought on 20th Apr.2008 at Tele Mall in Wuhan, P.R. China. Ten days after that, it didn't ring and send short messages. Then I took it to the seller, but was told that the model had been sold out and I had to wait at least three months for a new one. I had no choice but to go to the repairman. To my disappointment ,he said since it was a new model in China, it was impossible to fix it without the right spare parts. I was so desperate on hearing that for I can not wait that long. Therefore, I have to require that you send me a new one of the same model within a month.

  Thank you for your consideration.

  Sincerely yours,

  Bu Manyi

  【作文地带点评】

  本文内容要点齐全,语言丰富,结构合理,如头两句说明了购买手机后发现故障的情况,中间部分说明了无法维修而必须让公司更换手机的原委,最后明确提出自己的要求,明白流畅,将题目所提出的要点全部表达清楚,较好的完成了任务。全文以一般过去时为基调,结合主动语态与被动语态,并使用了so, but, therefore 等连接词,使文章结构完整严密。固定短语,如be sold out ,at least, had no choice but to go, to my disappointment, on hearing that 等的使用,使文章的语言显得地道而精炼。

  积累卡片英汉互译

  好词1. disappointment n.失望 2.desperate adj.绝望的3. consideration n.体谅

  好句To my disappointment ,he said since it was a new model in China, it was impossible to fix it without the right spare parts.

  令我失望的是,他说因为在中国是新款手机,所以没有配件来修理。

  评析:复杂句的组织; to my disappointment, 常用短语。

  2007高考英语满分作文

  【全国卷II】

  【试题回放】

  一家宾馆新开业,为吸引外国宾客,希望在互联网上进行宣传。请你用英语为其 写一篇文字介绍。主要内容包括:

  1.地点:距白山入口处500米;

  2.房间及价格:单人间(共20间),100元/天;双人间(共15间),150元/天;热水淋浴;3.餐饮:餐厅(中、西餐),咖啡厅(茶、咖啡);4.游泳池:全天免费开放; 5.欢迎预定。

  注意:1.词数100左右,开头语已为你写好;2.可适当增加细节,以使行文连贯。

  Welcome to Baishan Mountain Hotel!

  Baishan Mountain Hotel is now open for business.

  500 meters far from the entrance of Baishan Mountain, it provides single?person room, of which the price is RMB100 yuan per day and the number is 20, and 15 double? person rooms, with a price of RMB 150 yuan per day. It also provides hot water bath service. You can enjoy both Chinese and western food in the restaurant and drink coffee and tea in the cafe. The swimming pool is open for free the whole day. All these services can bring great convenience to you and are very enjoyable. So come to enjoy yourself!liuxuepaper.com

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