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终点又是起点考研英语作文

时间:2010-07-07来源:作文地带栏目:考研英语作文作者:英语作文 英语作文收藏:收藏本文
“终点又是新起点”这幅图画的主要细节有两处,一处是画中男孩正在冲刺到达终点。另一处是该终点又指示着新的起点。开头一段用很简略的词句把这两个主要细节全都交代清楚。

 

起点又是终点,是2004年的考研英语作文真题。下面作文地带提供您部分写作技巧及解析。

As we can see in the picture : there is a person exerting herself running towards an end which is lined with two festivous flags between two trees . Two words the "end" and the "start", are respective written in the two sides of the line which the person is running through on the ground.
It's apperent from the picture that an end can be also an new start in part. Enjoy as we are while eventually obtaining the peak, we shall continue our life, begin a new project and then just do it. An end, which is just an end of a period we sampled in the past, is not anything. It's believed that one have a higher start if he got a satisfying end. Whoever did not get good end last time need not be worried much . One can try he best to touch the sky because everyone have a new start.
WTO member as China becomes, we chinese can not stop our steps boosting ourselves in economic, cultural, and political strategies in the 21 century. China would try hard to satisfy WTO's extensive requirement in a short time than just dip in the happiness of becomeing all day long, doing nothing. As it's saying :everyday is another day. An end is also a start which renew us with hope.

【习作点评】
该篇习作采取三段式写作,首段描写了图画的内容,图画细节交代有些混乱,未能很好的表达出图画的内容,但句式较为复杂,符合写作的要求。中间段首句为主题句,概括的指出了这一段将要论述的内容,段落主体部分对起点和终点的逻辑关系进行了论述,条理性强,文字流畅,句式富有变化,但有个别表达不到位之处。末段中,作者举出中国入世的事实作为例子进行展开阐述,避免了中间段纯粹说理论证的单一,收到了良好的效果。
习作长度223词,字数略为超出要求。根据考研作文评分细则,该习作可定为第一档偏下,参考得分为:17分。
【习作修改示例】

As we can see in the picture : there is (as we can see 和 there is 重复,应该去掉一个)a person exerting herself is running towards an end which is lined with two festivous flags between two trees . Two words the "end" and the "start", are respectively written in the two sides of the line, which the person is running through on the ground.
(总起来作文地带感觉,这一段的描述有些混乱,最后一句话把终点和起点的交代与男孩正在跑步这两个不相干的细节放在一句里,显得不伦不类。另外,is lined with two festivous flags between two trees 这类非重点细节的描述也显得多余)
As we can see in the picture, a young person, with cheering face is running towards an end line. And at the final point, there is also an arrow drawing on the ground which indicates a starting point.
It's apperent from the picture apparently tells us that an end can be also an new start in part(作文地带-英语作文网

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