【修改后习作】
As we can see in the picture, a young person, with cheering face is running towards an end line. And at the final point, there is also an arrow drawing on the ground, which indicates a starting point.
The picture apparently tells us that an end can be also a new start. Enjoying as we are eventually obtaining the peak, we shall continue our life, begin a new project and then just do it. An end, which is just an end of a period we sampled in the past, is not anything. It's believed that one have a higher start if he got a satisfying end. Whoever did not get good end last time need not be worried much. One can try his best to touch the sky because everyone has a new start. From liuxuepaper.com.
As China becomes WTO‘s member, we Chinese can not stop our steps boosting ourselves in economic, cultural, and political strategies in the 21 century. China would try hard to satisfy WTO's extensive requirement in a short time than just dip in the happiness and doing nothing all day long. As it's saying: everyday is another day. An end is also a start, which renew us with hope.
【写作思路分析】
作文地带认为,“终点又是新起点”这幅图画的主要细节有两处,一处是画中男孩正在冲刺到达终点。另一处是该终点又指示着新的起点。开头一段用很简略的词句把这两个主要细节全都交代清楚。
中间段一开始就点出图画中心:“终点又是新起点”。作者从生活的高度对这一观点的哲理性进行了分析,清楚的讲明了为什么终点又是新起点的道理,文字十分优美。
由于不是问题解决型的作文题目,末段不能提出解决措施,作者在这里以中国为例,卡入终点又是起点这一观点,形成了对图画中心的进一步分析,设计十分巧妙。
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